Writer's tips
1. When you're writing be careful of using the same adjectives and verbs. They may come off as mundane or too repetitive: words like yawned, still and mostly.
2. Making sure that you are separating ideas into their own paragraphs.
3. Don't douse a sentence with too many adjectives or adverbs. A sentence like: The puffy coats sat like a streaming stew is doing a bit too much.
4. Cut the use of too many adverbs especially with "ly" . Words like suffixes, mostly, extremely, tiredly should be dropped.
5.Think about how close you want the reader to be to the person who is telling the story.